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Joe M.-M. Burlington / United States, Male, 31
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  • POEM: A New Friend by Sarah Sisson (1/24/2009 4:11:00 AM)

    I agree, new friends in the dynamic of a life are joyous things, but at the same time I think you underplay the fact that it is difficult to fit them into the scheme of things. Still a very good read.

  • POET: GREENWOLFE 1962 (1/24/2009 3:45:00 AM)

    I am not trying to be cruel or mean though I undoubtedly might, but you really need to work on your sound. I wrote things like this when I was in the 5th grade, though admittedly, a little less verbose and often with not so much subject matter at my disposal, but quite similar in simplicity. I enjoy your subject matter, but unless your audience is an assembly of the world's 4th graders, please spice it up a little, at least vary your line structure a little. You say you've read Shakespeare and Dickinson, but you're too uniform. Remember that on of the best parts of writing formal poetry, is breaking form to add import or delay understanding from line to line. Without variation, people might (as I admittedly had to fight doing out of respect to you) skip to the end or stop reading entirely. However, as a poet you have every right to continue in any way you wish. I just couldn't continue reading your work without at least voicing this. I really do enjoy the content.

    A fan (albeit, a critical one)

  • POET: GREENWOLFE 1962 (1/24/2009 2:52:00 AM)

    Heartbreaking and so very beautifully composed. One of the best poems I've read in so long.

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